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== Before submitting ==
Before you submit this, I'd suggest running it by some other editors for spelling mistakes and a wording check. Making an entire strategy page by yourself can also make the strategy very biased.<br>[[User:GrampaSwood|<font color="DB9C1F">GrampaSwood</font>]] ([[User talk:GrampaSwood|<font color="DB9C1F">talk</font>]]) 20:03, 2 September 2021 (UTC)
: I was already planning to go through the entire page after I'm finished and correct any grammar mistakes I found, so I won't need help on that teritory. But asking other editors for potential biases does seem like a good idea.
:[[User:Lolimsogreat21|Lolimsogreat21]] ([[User talk:Lolimsogreat21|talk]]) 21:41, 2 September 2021 (UTC)Lolimsogreat21
::I'd still say you need help on this, you still replace "due" with "duo" and replace "quite" with "quit". The reason it needs to be checked by people is that rewriting an entire strategy by yourself is not a very good thing, strategies are meant to be strategies given by multiple people with different experiences to make a good combination of strategies and tips. I'd recommend after this one to ''add'' onto existing strategies, rather than to rewrite them entirely.<br>[[User:GrampaSwood|<font color="DB9C1F">GrampaSwood</font>]] ([[User talk:GrampaSwood|<font color="DB9C1F">talk</font>]]) 10:13, 11 September 2021 (UTC)
::: It's not that I rewrote the entire Goldrush strategy just because I prefer completely changing a page rather then adding onto it. No, doing that is tiresome and ''very'' time consuming. But unfortunately, some (If not all...but we'll get to that later) map strategy pages leave no other choice other then to entirely, or at least partially, rewrite them. This is because of a couple of reasons.

::: 1. Many of the map strategies are filled with information which is simply too general for that map, and has no business being there. Because of this, I'll first need to remove all of that excess information and replace it with something appropriate, before I can add any additions.

::: 2. I also plan to introduce a minor formatting change which should be implemented in every map strategy. The change consists of dividing the existing map strategy pages by checkpoints and stages, so that every checkpoint can be thoroughly covered and explored, something I already did with the Mercenary park and Goldrush strategy. So even if the page in question contains appropriate information, I'll still reorganize it and slightly reword it, for the sake of formatting.

::: Here, I hope I made myself clear enough. [[User:Lolimsogreat21|Lolimsogreat21]] ([[User talk:Lolimsogreat21|talk]]) 12:17, 12 September 2021 (UTC)Lolimsogreat21

:::: I certainly have been a proponent of removing generic (not specific to the map) and/or redundant (already stated elsewhere) strategy, that doesn't quite seem to case with the Gold Rush that it had generic or redundant content.  But, more towards our previous discussions of newer map and Event map Strategies, absence or removal of redundant or generic Strategies '''''does not create ''any'' imperative''''' to fill in the voids left by their absence or removal.

:::: When I stated editing, Strategies were very messy, having, as intended, grown by many small individual contributions, and I made a few efforts to clean a few, but I had two premises; 1) improve grammar, structure, and logical flow 2) ''preserve'' other's contributions as much as possible. Strategies pages aren't so important in any scheme of things that we have to thoroughly adjudicate everyone's suggestions of how to play a map.   

:::: However, between my newness to the wiki and recurring imposed hiatuses, the project created by others to broadly improved the Strategy pages though the Project. Others managed to get a lot (basically all) of this work done without me. So, I approach existing well-developed strategy pages such as Gold Rush with the presumption of having been reworked ''and vetted'' under that effort.

:::: So, it was not obvious to me that Gold Rush Community Strategy needed rewriting.

:::: ''"doing that is tiresome and ''very'' time consuming."''  Reviewing total rewrites for omissions, errors, and biases is also tiresome and ''very'' time consuming; this work requires side by side comparison of the whole page of before and after to see what was added or removed. When I have made gross changes in a page, nothing ever so close to such a rewrite (e.g., Synopses), I would list and justify details of the changes in the Talk page. 

:::: Off the bat, as far as I can tell, you deleted the BLU Gold Rush Stage 1 rollout strategy that is/was very specific to the map. On asymmetric mode maps, BLU always have rollout, and so there are generic rollout strategy, but the rollout strategy that you removed was very specific to the Gold Rush Stage one roll out. You may have also removed BLU Stage one roll out from Mercenary Park, but I cannot tell for sure without tiresome and ''very'' time consuming cross-referencing without '''''any''''' help at all from Revision history. 

:::: Narrative format: It is not like I have never written a narrative strategy, and a narrative format, ''especially for offense'' can be effective, especially where strategy engages multiple class cooperations. An example one I wrote somewhat like this is [[Community Mossrock strategy]]. Hypothetically, a limitation to narrative style arises when there are conditional narratives; alternate team makeups, alternate attacks, alternate defensive deployments, etc..

:::: Without further time to analyze, your effort seems to focus more on direct control point captures with less attention to essential ''de facto'' stages of control of spaces between the capture. Taking a time-limited review of your [[Community Mercenary Park strategy]] rewrite, again limited largely to BLU roll out, you replaced more detailed ''map specific'' discussion of control of the intermediate areas with a generic statement that is true for ''any'' asymmetric mode map, ''"After the round starts and the gates open up, the Blu team should be aggressively pushing out of their spawn in order to capture the'' <roll out area>." Name any AD or PL where this does not apply?

:::: I did need to see the origin of what you replaced in Mercenary Park; honestly, I might have written something like that. But, I see that you, without explanation, replaced your own [https://wiki.teamfortress.com/w/index.php?title=Community_Mercenary_Park_strategy&oldid=2955310 26 March 2021] map-specific rollout and area control strategy with much more generic phases "At start, roll out and control this area and this area ... and then the first CP." Again, this is true of any AD or PL, and if all one is going to say is not really different for any map, then there is no reason to say it.  "Blu team has X ways to exit ..." is [[observation|simple counting]], unless you offer strategies that differentiate the exits. 

:::: Sorry for the delayed, limited, and possibly erroneous analysis.

:::: [[User:Mikado282|<span style="font-family: Impact"><font color="db9c1f">''' M I K A D O 282 '''</font></span><span style="font-family: Arial "><font color="00ff00"> <small>⊙</small>⊙⊙⊙⊙<small>⊙ ⊙⊙  ⊙⊙</small></font></span>]] <small>([[User_talk:Mikado282|talk]] | [[Special:Contributions/Mikado282|contribs]])</small> ([[User:Mikado282/Help Wanted!|'''''Help Wanted!''''']]) 17:22, 19 September 2021 (UTC)

::::: Ah! What a nice surprise to have you here Mikado :D. I almost thought that you wouldn't leave a comment of any kind on my strategy, because you were busy or something. But yet here you are, and I'm glad for that, even if your comment is mostly criticism (which was expected) :(

:::::Anyway, before I start tackleing (Is this a word?) your points one by one, I have to tell you that I won't be doing this in any particular order, so sorry in advance for any confusion. Now, let's begin.

::::: 1. I was wondering something, what is this "Narrative strategy" which you've talked about? Is this what I was doing all this time? If yes, what is then a "conditional strategy" which you also use in your comment.

::::: 2. Although I would usually consider using only the Blu rollout part of a strategy as basis for its criticism unjust, I must admit that this particular strategy was way, way too long, and you certainly didn't have enough time to read, and evaluate it all. So I'm okay with you judging my Goldrush rework with this method, but there are still some questions I have. First of, where is the Goldrush-Stage 1 "very specific" Blu rollout which I supposedly removed. Because I just went to the 2014 version of Goldrush strategy (The last version of this page before I started editing in March of this year), and nowhere did I see any kind of a Blu rollout or something connected to it being mentioned. Back then, the General Strategy only contained some information about the Blu having to capture the Attic on stage 1 (Which I included in my rework), Cart serving as excellent cover, Red Demoman's traps being very useful, and "brute force" which shouldn't be underestimated. There is no "Very specific Blu rollout which I removed", unless I missing something. You also said that I deleted a Blu rollout from the Mercenary Park strategy, something which doesn't make much sense. Simply because there was nothing, and I mean absolutely '''nothing''' present within the General strategy section of the aforementioned Mercenary Park article, up until the point when I started editing and had to build up everything from scratch. 

::::: 2.1 Now, perhaps you mean that I removed a Blu rollout from my very first revision of those two pages. Which still doesn't explain much, considering that my old revision of Mercenary Park strategy from March (Which was so abysmally terrible...) still contained what you would consider a "General Blu rollout", and it really wasn't to different from my newest revision in July.

::::: 3. You also mention in your comment that I'm more focused on directly capturing a control point, instead of focusing on "de facto spaces between the checkpoints". Which is once again, untrue. I do indeed give out tips for securing those spaces between the individual objectives. For example, on Goldrush, I lay out a tactic on how to take out the ''Raised Tracks'', or how to encircle and destroy the ''Hut'', or how to secure the ''Attic'', or how to take over the ''Watchtower'', or how to flush out the defenders from the ''Choke area'', or how to climb onto the Platform and the Truck House. I don't just go: ''"Ohhh, simply push push the Cart up to the checkpoint 1, while shooting at the defenders commonly located inside the A, B and C location"''. No, I usually say something like this: ''"First, capture the location A this way, before moving onto the location B which can be captured from this angle. Once you've done that, it should be safe to continue pushing the payload, just beaware of the defenders attempting a last stand inside the location C.

::::: 4. Now, for closing remarks, I would like to ask you the big question I was waiting for. Considering that both your, and InShane's response to my rework were mostly negative (For mostly justified reasons), I begin wondering: "Should I just delete the entire Goldrush rework and move onto to something more productive?". I mean, at this point it seems that the page is beyond saving, and that my skills at writing map strategies just cannot met the standards of the wiki. So if you '''do''' want me to delete it, what should we do with the current state of Goldrush strategy, which also currently hosts my edits which are equally bad. Should I just revert that page back to its 2014 version? On the topic of that, should we do also the same to my Mercenary Park Strategy, which you seemed to dislike as well.

::::: Well, that's about it. I know that this response probably seems very unorganized and messy, and that it doesn't answer all of the points you brought up, but hey...it's the best I could do, which isn't very much as you should know by now... Welp, with that out of the way, I wish you a pleasant rest of the day, and an enjoyable stay. Good night!

::::: [[User:Lolimsogreat21|Lolimsogreat21]] ([[User talk:Lolimsogreat21|talk]]) 20:09, 19 September 2021 (UTC)Lolimsogreat21

:::::: I generally have little to do with Strategy other than to t-up new pages for new maps, including cleaning out cut and paste from Event maps. I usually just let people post what one-se two-ses the want without review especially with there are no bad patterns. But you asked me to look at a big edit, which prompted me to review MP.

:::::: 1) Conditional narrative; suppose there are two or more very effective defenses. How does a single narrative address "if they do this then do this and this and this, but if they do this then do such and such and such. If the narrative is detailed, then it risks tl;dnr, but if it is too brief, it just lists go through this area and this area and then cap, which is relatively observational. Honestly, on (probably unfairly) brief examination, your final efforts to me seemed to skip the key areas before the caps, to focus mot on the caps. (What comes to mind is the rollout of Upwards, where too many team can't get out of Spawn.) As as I see below, your past efforts may have gone into more detail than in the present MP.

:::::: The more narrative style does 1) present one POV, maybe even overthought 2) doesn't seem to be conducive to future single contributions of specific tactics others might come up with.

:::::: 2) I have revisited the Mercenary Park differences, previously I went back to far back to to the roughly 14 April version, which was my previous basis. From this, it seems that you may have deleted your content. It looked like you had cut back on content, prompting editors’ concerns that you have removed others’ contributions. but tonight, tracing all of your edits, you were responsible for about 90% of the content. In fact, probably most of what you removed was your voluminous contributions.  This is all very difficult to track. That's part of the cost of this, for me to go back over your editing patterns, I learned that I had not gone far enough back, after realizing that you had reverted your own work, yes, you reduced roll out, but now I see it was your earlier roll out you were reducing.

:::::: 3) Saying "I changed it because it was terrible" can set off a patroller's alarm, but now it appears that with MP, you were calling your previous work terrible.  I am just now taking a few hours to check just a few classes.  (Still I just lost an hour getting accidentally lost in change tracking, I was distracted by several generic class strategies in the 2014 you suggest reverting to should have been removed, but in the end you removed them. (OK, just a couple in Pyro, but I that is only one of two I checked.) So, don't go back to 2014. )

:::::: As I have commented before, an empty section of a strategy page does not rate the label (libel) of  "terrible" (not that that is what you were calling terrible). 

:::::: So it is still at a point where the scale of your proposal is large, but now I have a bit better context.  Still it it is difficult with your style (compared to previously bullet point-by-billet point styles) to catch just what the tactics are and how specifics of a map can be used to one's advantage. When you say that it was so complex that you had to rewrite it, that is waht is now set up for anyone else that want to add a different POV.

:::::: sorry, wayyyy past gtg  [[User:Mikado282|<span style="font-family: Impact"><font color="db9c1f">''' M I K A D O 282 '''</font></span><span style="font-family: Arial "><font color="00ff00"> <small>⊙</small>⊙⊙⊙⊙<small>⊙ ⊙⊙  ⊙⊙</small></font></span>]] <small>([[User_talk:Mikado282|talk]] | [[Special:Contributions/Mikado282|contribs]])</small> ([[User:Mikado282/Help Wanted!|'''''Help Wanted!''''']]) 03:50, 29 September 2021 (UTC)